Logline: A young popular soccer star hangs out with his badminton loving friends (and an educated bookworm) with the impossible goal of making them love soccer.
Act 1 (Setup): This story starts off with a rainy park and an empty bench, then after the rain moves on, a book worm named Jack comes out into the park. Right after that Freddie and Afshine come to the park but Jack scares the living daylight out of Freddie as Freddie is scared of slimy creatures doing out of the mud.
Act 2 (Confrontation): Vomer Groner comes to the park as he is done with his soccer practice. He walks up juggling a soccer ball. He says "Sup" to all of his buddies and says, "Lets Play Ball!". They agree wholeheartedly as they are extremely bored. Vomer doesn't score any goals and passes all the balls he gets to his buddies to let them score and have fun. They all play for a while and even the bookworm is engaged in the game.
Act 3 (Resolution): Vomer and his friends have a very good time and they don't even ask for him to come play some badminton with them. Mission Impossible has succeeded!
This is a cute story, but I think that the story needs a bigger problem to allow the story to progress. If the plot was bigger, you can expand on more details of the story.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the feedback! :)
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